Suggestions for Revision

(in no special order of importance)

    1.      Changing the point of view:  This might mean switching from first-person to third-person, or third to first, or even narrating the story from the point of view of a different character.

    2.      Lengthening or adding episodes:  Frequently, you will have passages or sections that can be interestingly developed; you may also see places where you can add entirely new scenes.  Such additions should add to our understanding of your main character and to the complexity of his/her plight.  There may also, of course, be scenes or portions of scenes that you now see as non-essential to our understanding of the story and that can therefore be deleted.
 
    3.      Adding (or deleting) characters:  Your focus can sometimes be sharpened by eliminating extraneous characters; on the other hand, an additional character may add to the complexity of your story, allow you to dramatize another aspect of your main character's situation.
 
    4.      Deepening the characterization:  Memories, flashbacks,  desires, dreams, fantasies, action, description, and biography are some of the ways you can deepen characterization.

    5.      Filling in or sharpening the sense details:  First drafts frequently are thin in texture because details are lacking.  You may see what you're imagining as you write, but can your reader?  Conversely, are there details that are not needed, that slow down the momentum of your narrative without adding to its meaningful texture?  Connect details to the mood of your point of view character.

    6.      Making greater use of the setting:  Where does your story take place?  Why is it important for it to happen in this particular place?  What aspects of the setting can be used to enhance character development and theme?

    7.      Sharpening the dialogue:  Are there significant conversations that could be developed, dialogue that would convey tension and reveal character?  Does your dialogue mimick the rhythm of actual speech?  Do your characters use language appropriate to their age, class, ethnicity, gender, etc.?  Does their diction and syntax convey a sense of individuality/personality?

    8.      Refining the style:  Is sentence structure smooth, polished, varied?  Look for instances of possible confusion in meaning and remedy them.  Check punctuation and spelling carefully.  You might employ your computer's grammar/spell check as a starting point, but do not depend on it.   Paragraph structure should also be scrutinized carefully; look for paragraphs that are bloated, overextended, as well as for those that look undernourished, incomplete.

    9.      Strengthening the sense of meaning/theme:  This is perhaps the most elusive of aspects.  You may not discover your story's meaning until the fourth or fifth draft.  Once you've discovered it, you can go over the story again and look for opportunities to heighten that meaning and better prepare for the ending.

  10.     Changing the structure:  Does your story begin in the right place?  Are there more effective ways to arrange scenes, to order flashbacks?  Experiment with moving paragraphs from one place to another.  The best structure may not be strictly chronological.  Is the proportion of summary/scene balanced in favor of scene (it should be)?  Are there summarized passages that might work better as scenes or mini-scenes?  Are there scenes or portions of scenes that are sluggish and that could be more efficiently summarized or even eliminated?

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